tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post1762986772645656015..comments2013-06-07T23:48:07.842-04:00Comments on 409 for Thought: Malthus Paragraph Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00331030883371371862noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-18131968733065884102012-09-14T11:38:50.563-04:002012-09-14T11:38:50.563-04:00Now that I read back, I agree because Malthus main...Now that I read back, I agree because Malthus main point was toward the poor who should do preventive checks and etc.Eunice Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07686425322952884708noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-5733157878114230962012-09-14T11:36:46.288-04:002012-09-14T11:36:46.288-04:00Great paragraph! Try switching to a synonym for &q...Great paragraph! Try switching to a synonym for "increased" in the 2nd sentence because its a little repetitive if you have the word twice in a sentence. Nice transition words as well as use of vocabulary.<br />Summer S.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16055381066373695828noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-69508734452065738262012-09-14T11:36:27.209-04:002012-09-14T11:36:27.209-04:00Good job eunice! Be sure to include the dynamic be...Good job eunice! Be sure to include the dynamic between the rich and the poor and why Malthus does not like the poor.Bahar Sheikhinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-26416382266763366882012-09-14T11:27:02.853-04:002012-09-14T11:27:02.853-04:00great part on how the poor make their situation wo...great part on how the poor make their situation worse, but you do not talk about how the checks specifically apply to the poor as Malthus belivedAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08936250117200687434noreply@blogger.com