tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post7660196049788687063..comments2013-06-07T23:48:07.842-04:00Comments on 409 for Thought: Malthus Paragraph Jacob FeinerAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00331030883371371862noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-41354247864977517392012-09-14T11:43:24.162-04:002012-09-14T11:43:24.162-04:00I would add a comma after "Although innovatio...I would add a comma after "Although innovations have been made" because that is an introductory dependent clause. In addition, saying "the food supply will be strained" does not make perfect sense, for it already is somewhat strained. Other than that your paragraph is amazing, nice job choosing your evidence and analyzing it.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01933099639857301536noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-34396643175507136442012-09-14T11:22:52.246-04:002012-09-14T11:22:52.246-04:00thanks Carter and Eunice for the grammar suggestio...thanks Carter and Eunice for the grammar suggestions. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08936250117200687434noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-62099839605190077772012-09-14T11:14:31.531-04:002012-09-14T11:14:31.531-04:00Great paragraph but you need to go through and mak...Great paragraph but you need to go through and make sure spelling and grammar are correct such as in the the first quote in your paragraphAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06701476197249570606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-36029905943972429972012-09-14T11:13:50.051-04:002012-09-14T11:13:50.051-04:00The evidences corresponds to the thesis and fluent...The evidences corresponds to the thesis and fluent use of quotes from the original reading. I suggest to capitalize " this Demonstrate..." at line 4--> This quote demonstrates... Eunice Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07686425322952884708noreply@blogger.com