tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post8988937719440131784..comments2013-06-07T23:48:07.842-04:00Comments on 409 for Thought: Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00331030883371371862noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-64381637065030856622012-09-14T14:12:38.792-04:002012-09-14T14:12:38.792-04:00Okayy that helps, thanks :) Okayy that helps, thanks :) Natashahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05439947393301839829noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-21055224596812751932012-09-14T14:04:39.711-04:002012-09-14T14:04:39.711-04:00I liked your thesis, it really helped get the poin...I liked your thesis, it really helped get the point across but I do think you should re-word your conclusion. Try not to use the word "concluding"Tiffany Caihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11434602393849988867noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-22809636784766971392012-09-14T14:03:36.581-04:002012-09-14T14:03:36.581-04:00I liked you first piece of analylis and evidence b...I liked you first piece of analylis and evidence because it was precise and to the point. Your second piece of evidence should have some analysis. -Evan MeganAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17880032898823736229noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-19050130093588012222012-09-14T14:03:10.124-04:002012-09-14T14:03:10.124-04:00Good paragraph! i think you should re-write your c...Good paragraph! i think you should re-write your concluding sentence because it sounds a little awkward in the middle and connect your second quote to your paragraph. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01257787816601645165noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6974207119137509719.post-72498104561457873892012-09-14T14:01:54.160-04:002012-09-14T14:01:54.160-04:00Natasha, you have a great thesis and good specific...Natasha, you have a great thesis and good specific quotes that help to prove your argument. However, your analysis could be a little deeper. Take one more step, you have a great basis, add a "so what?". For example, because there is a need for food, what will happen?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09493523681076589117noreply@blogger.com