When writing the nationalism essay
I created three drafts until I turned my final essay in. The first draft was
created from my outline which was then peer edited. My second draft was edited
by my older sister, which seemed to help me a lot. Then for the third draft
that lead me to my final, I edited it myself for spelling mistakes and
finalized a couple of ideas. My sources for feedback where my sister who is in
college, a classmate and myself. Next writing assignment I definitely would
like to spend more time creating drafts that lead me to my final. The most
common type of feedback that I received was to connect my analysis back to my
thesis as well as elaborating on my ideas more instead of just mentioning
something and jumping to the next thing. I think an issue that I struggle with
is actually voicing my ideas in an organized manner more effectively. I find
that sometimes I try to fit in too many ideas that don’t quite relate exactly
to my thesis. Next writing assessment I want to visit the lab, and try to
organize my ideas better with thorough evidence that connects directly to the
thesis. One example in my first body paragraph is; “Nationalism may seem like a
deconstructive force but in reality it is constructive because it brought
people together through struggling commonalities that they shared.” Then after
revising it became “Although at first glance nationalism may seem like a
deconstructive force, it is in reality constructive because the brutality that
they faced brought the populace together through universal struggles that
allowed people to share and create a stronger dominant nation.”. The transition
from the first draft to final showed how taking the time to work hard on the
way I express my thoughts allows the message that I am trying to convey be
portrayed more easily.
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