Evan Megan
Term 2 Extra Credit
1/24/13
In
the nationalism essay I used formative assessment. Using feedback from you, my
classmates, Mr. Kelton, and my mom, I was able to improve my essay. My most
common feedback was to create more specific evidence and analysis. Thanks to
formative assessment I was able to improve on this flaw throughout the drafts
of my essay. For example, during peer edits, a classmate told me that I should
find a specific event in which Gandhi peacefully protested against the British,
rather than just broadly stating that he staged many peaceful protests. Using
this feedback, I changed my evidence from Gandhi led peaceful protests, to
Gandhi led the salt march, which protested British salt taxes. However, in my
later drafts it was harder to completely change evidence, so rather than
creating more specific evidence I created more specific analysis, which better targeted
my claim.
Throughout
my three drafts, my essay improved due to formative assessment. Specific
feedback helped me target my errors. In the future I know to avoid the same
mistakes, I can put in the extra leg work to find good specific evidence before
creating drafts.
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