The formative assessment from this term was the Nationalism Essay. I completed three drafts, the first was from class out-line which was used for peer-editing, the second based off the lab-visit feedback, and finally my final. The sources of the feedback I received was from both the peer-editing workshop and the lab-visit. The most common feedback I received was from both the lab and a peer was that I had to make a factual observation about Nationalism in my thesis. This placing an actual observation in my thesis not just an idea, this further strengthening the thesis. I will prevent this mistake in the future by checking for facts that I can put right into my thesis to make an observation, but then make an argument off the fact. In my original thesis as my observation I wrote, "....allowing the people to make equally important sacrifices, leading them to self government". After visiting the lab I rewrote the observation to sound more like, "....the people share an overall goal to self-govern, therefore emphasizing a national rather than international goal". This formative assessment helped expand my idea into a thesis and then into a full essay.
Giuliana Psyhogeos- Blue
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