Carter Riskind
Tan Block
On The Principle Of Population
Although industrialization has prompted a need in growth of the population, the reckless reproducing of the poor is creating a strain of the food supply. On the earth there are too many people reproducing with out the subsistent from the earth to sustain the population. This matters, because without that trustworthy and sustainable resource the population will decrease and have the chance of many people dying. Also the poor was thought to be the main problem, so the wealthy had no intention to aid or improve conditions for the poor. The reason for not aiding the poor was because the wealthy thought that nature would take care of the poor to decrease population and increase the amount of food for everyone else.
You need more specific evidence like quotes and you do not prove your point but rather explain them only showing/proving why the rich do not help the poor.
ReplyDeleteI liked your paragraph. I think it would be improved if you added a sentence at the end summing everything up. Good Job!
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ReplyDeleteCould you please clarify the first sentence you wrote.
DeleteYou need more evidence from the reading to support your topic sentence. Maybe add some good transition words for flow. Overall though, GREAT JOB
ReplyDeletenow that makes more sense thank you for clarifying.
DeleteGood work. You need more analysis to make it flow better to go along with your evidence.
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