While a large population gives factories more employees, it causes the food supply to run low, therefore causing positive and preventative checks to be necessary in order to prevent the poor from overpopulating and blaming the government. Large populations are beneficial for factories because there will be many people doing labor and large numbers help make mass production possible. However, the population will eventually outgrow the resources that are needed to sustain it, resulting in a need for positive checks such as natural disasters to keep the poor from over-increasing the population. Also, as Thomas R. Malthus suggests, poor people themselves are the cause of their own poverty, yet are blaming the government for bad living conditions and scarce food. Using positive and preventative checks will benefit the human race in the future by helping balance the amount of food available with the population.
Amy Hsieh Blue block
Giving a/some examples of positive checks would help readers who are unfamiliar with Malthus' article understand you paragraph better. That also adds specific details from the text which will help build better e/a sets.
ReplyDeleteYou could explain a bit more about what positive checks are, and it's significance people and food source!
ReplyDeleteYou should include why the poor are responsible for their poverty, and focus more on population checks and less on the amount of factory workers. Lastly you should explain the different between positive and preventative checks.
ReplyDeleteYou also may want to think about adding more about the poor blaming the upper class and give a bit more detail about the checks.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your feedback. I will make sure to include more examples of positive checks and explain more on the purpose of population checks.
ReplyDeleteSarah- I was wondering what you meant by e/a sets.
Amy
evidence/analysis :)
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