Population
Control is necessary by natural and man controlled checks in order to stabilize
food supply because the poor produces more than they can manage. When Malthus
lists his concerns on overpopulation, he specifically connects population to
poverty. The poor people of the world blame the rich for taking more than they
can handle, when really it’s the poor who are taking more than the needed
amount. The poor overproduce children and therefore they don’t have enough food
for their family. This is because their wages are very low. The solution to
prevent these food shortages is through population control. Food grows slower than people, therefore it
is the population that needs to be watched, not the food. The poor also need to
take the responsibility and the consequences of their poor decisions (poor
decisions being having too many kids). The poor needs to use preventative checks to
limit the population and stabilize food supply.
This is a good paragraph but i think that you should mention how the specific preventitve checks helped keep the birth rate low. And also it was not only the poor that had to follow them in was everyone. I know that they where the ones that were complaining just mention it was everyone.
ReplyDelete" when really it’s the poor who are taking more than the needed amount." I think that the poor aren't taking more than they need but not thinking how much it costs to sustain a large family which means that they will not be to support their family.
ReplyDeleteTry using words like food grows linear while the population is exponential. otherwise those suggestions the paragraph was good.
try to add transition words so your paragraph runs smoothly, and also, like steven said, you should revise the sentence: "When really its the poor who are taking more than the needed amount.". good job overall.
ReplyDeleteYour summarizing sentence of ""the poor also need to take the responsibility and consequences of..." is effective. However, I would also include information about the "positive checks."
ReplyDeleteGood job adding the different conflicts on the topic between the rich and the poor! However, you could try wording some of your sentences clearer.
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