Lamia Farah
Although it is human nature to reproduce, Malthus argues that personal and over all population should be proportionate to supply of food through positive and preventative checks. For example, preventive checks are thinking ahead. Before having a family, Malthus argues that the parents should think ahead and have kids based on their wealth. Malthus thinks this will decrease the amount of people in poverty because poor people will not have as many poor kids. Therefore, Malthus thinks that poor people with large families are not educated enough to control the size of their family, thus creating their own misery. On the other hand, positive checks are natural ways in which population decreases. These include, "extreme poverty, bad nursing of children, great towns, excess of all kinds, the whole train of common diseases and epidemics, wars, plague, and famine" (36). Although these natural occurances are misfortunate, over all their effect on the population is positive. The lower population helps to keep the balance of food and human population. Through both these checks, population would keep in balance with food, preventing mass poverty.
I think you have very strong and clear evidence and analysis. The only thing is that there are some places in which the wording is a bit unclear. In addition, I don't think you always have to say that "Malthus thinks" with the evidence. I think you could just state it, but I like that you attach his name with the analysis.
ReplyDeleteThank you Catherine! I will try to improve my wording based on your feedback.
ReplyDeleteI think that this paragraph is very good. You evidence analysis and transitions are very clear and there was nothing in your thesis that you didn't cover. I think this is a fine paragraph but if you want you could add a little bit more dimension to your argument by emphasizing the poor people's not following of preventative checks by mentioning how preventative the wealthy families were.
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Great paragraph Lamia!!! Your in depth explanation of the evidence makes Malthus' opinions very clear. However, you might want to mention how by having more kids, not only will the children be poor, but the person who had them will be poorer by creating more people to support financially. Good job Lamia!
ReplyDeleteLamia very well done paragraph, good use of quotes and dividing up what Malthus was trying to present in his writing. I would focus on the transition to the checks though and really make it more flow into talking about the checks.
ReplyDeleteI love your paragraph Lamia! I think you could use some more transitions into talking about the checks, and incorporate the parents decrease in money when they have children. :)
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