Although the population increase improves the labor force, Malthus criticizes the lower class for reproducing beyond their limits and insists upon preventative and positive "checks" in order to create a sustainable balance between food and population. He believes that poor families who can barely afford two children are having five or six, and they blame the rich and the partial uncivilized society for them being miserably distressed. He accuses them of searching for the cause of their injustice, and in doing so they always fail to realize that the cause is themselves. He believed that there was so reason to better the conditions of the poor, whom he considered the most licentious part of the population. By upsetting the population/resource balance, they bring misery. A set of checks are proposed to maintain a sustainable population and food. These checks include eliminating severe labor, extreme poverty, bad nursing of children, common diseases, etc. Limiting the size of the families, he believes, is a preventable
check.
heeey kyle so I think that your thesis/topic sentence is really good and so is the first part of your evidence and analysis but I think that you should expand some more about the checks because I feel like they are evidence but there is no analysis.
ReplyDeleteholaaa, i think you have a really good basis for your paragraph. Your topic sentence is really strong. But there are some unclear parts. Also, go deeper in your analysis. Overall, good jobb
ReplyDeleteyour thesis is Amazing!! you have really good evidence but have to expand on your analysis a little more. and include a concluding sentence at the end :)
ReplyDeleteHey man, thanks for the feedback! I totally agree in terms of me just expanding on my analysis and conclusion. I'll also make sure to mention positive check , as they are quite important in my argument.
DeleteThe topic sentence is good in explaining the main point of the paragraph. I think in the end you could emphasize more the effect of limiting families and why it is helpful.
ReplyDeleteI really like your ideas, but maybe just double check on your first piece of evidence. I'm not sure that the lower class was blaming the higher class, I think that they just didn't blame themselves and malthus thought that they should.
ReplyDeleteWell worded writing Kyle, just make sure that you also mention positive checks as well because I feel like you integrates some concepts. Good stuff.
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