Friday, September 14, 2012

Malthus Paragraph

Although food will sustain a growing population for a limited period time, Malthus believes the idea of constant checks such as disease and famine will allow for a much longer period sustained population. Malthus states that too much reproduction will outgrow food supply and humans need food to reproduce. He also believes that earth will not be able to provide for a growing population. That being said, you shouldn't have more people that what you can support. In order to stop an overgrowing population, Malthus suggests that people should stay abstinent. This way, people wouldn't have as much children and population wont overgrow.

5 comments:

  1. Good evidence. Need more analysis to make it flow better.

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  2. Great word choices and fluent sentences. Thesis relates to Malthus idea. I think if you can bring more deeper about Malthus's overall message and analysis. Maybe going back to the reading can help you.

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  3. I find this essay very well written however, I believe you need more evidence from the reading rather than stating the obvious, that humans need food to reproduce.

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  4. Dear Jonathan,

    Great Job on the paragraph! I like how you point out the key points in Malthus' argument however if you add more evidence, as well as analysis based on that evidence, your paragraph will drastically improve. Overall keep up the good work and I really enjoyed reading this paragraph.

    -Michael

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  5. Too improve, I would provide more analysis, and avoid exaggerations. For example, Malthus does not say to stay completely abstinent, he just says not to have more kids than you can provide for. Other than that your paragraph is fine, nice job.

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