Tuesday, September 18, 2012

Man has the power to control the population through preventative check, balancing the birth rate brought on by the poor blaming the upper class and not taking responsibility for their choices, causing an increase of poverty. Malthus believed that the way to control population and hunger was to prevent overpopulation to occur, he would do this using preventative check, where he would make a limit to the amount of offspring that each family could produce in order to keep poverty and crime to a minimum. He believed that there was a connection between poverty and population that as population increased, so did poverty and hunger because the amount of food didn't change, but as the population increased, the food had to be distributed to more people. to try and prevent poverty, overpopulation and hunger, Malthus proposed a child limit, to increase the amount of food received by citizens.

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  1. Nate, you should think about making smoother transitions in your second draft in order to be more clear.

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    1. Thanks for pointing this out. I will be sure to fix it for my final draft.

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  2. in the middle of your paragraph there is a run on sentence that you should address and fix. Also talk about the natural preventive checks and he man mindset ones that allow them to watch how much they produce in their families.

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    1. I wasn't aware of the run on sentence and i will take into consideration the changes you propose. Thanks!

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  3. You may want to think about adding a concluding sentence summing everything up.

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    1. I agree. a concluding sentence would sum up my thoughts and keep me from making an open ended paragraph.

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  4. you should use more specific evidence to back up your paragraph

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