Tuesday, September 18, 2012

Malthus ¶



            Population Control is necessary by natural and man controlled checks in order to stabilize food supply because the poor produces more than they can manage. When Malthus lists his concerns on overpopulation, he specifically connects population to poverty. The poor people of the world blame the rich for taking more than they can handle, when really it’s the poor who are taking more than the needed amount. The poor overproduce children and therefore they don’t have enough food for their family. This is because their wages are very low. The solution to prevent these food shortages is through population control.  Food grows slower than people, therefore it is the population that needs to be watched, not the food. The poor also need to take the responsibility and the consequences of their poor decisions (poor decisions being having too many kids).  The poor needs to use preventative checks to limit the population and stabilize food supply.

5 comments:

  1. This is a good paragraph but i think that you should mention how the specific preventitve checks helped keep the birth rate low. And also it was not only the poor that had to follow them in was everyone. I know that they where the ones that were complaining just mention it was everyone.

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  2. " when really it’s the poor who are taking more than the needed amount." I think that the poor aren't taking more than they need but not thinking how much it costs to sustain a large family which means that they will not be to support their family.

    Try using words like food grows linear while the population is exponential. otherwise those suggestions the paragraph was good.

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  3. try to add transition words so your paragraph runs smoothly, and also, like steven said, you should revise the sentence: "When really its the poor who are taking more than the needed amount.". good job overall.

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  4. Your summarizing sentence of ""the poor also need to take the responsibility and consequences of..." is effective. However, I would also include information about the "positive checks."

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  5. Good job adding the different conflicts on the topic between the rich and the poor! However, you could try wording some of your sentences clearer.

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